The Second Realm: A Military Portal Fantasy LitRPG Series

Mistakes: This is by far such sub par work from Michael Chatfield, that I'm just stunned that it was even published.You have missing letters, numbers inserted into words, messed up punctuation, misspelled words, miss used words, missing sentences, missing paragraphs, and more. This is nothing more than a bad rough draft that was never cleaned up and edited.Plot: you have three main plot lines that are jumbled, choppy,and not well fleshed out.Characters: I still like them but they can't carry a book this badly put together.I feel ripped off by the author that he published something so shoddy and I paid for it because his first series was so well done that I thought this series would have the same quality.Fooled me. I'll read book three just because I bought all the books in this series at one time.However if book three shows the same lack of care and quality I will drop this author for good. My hard earned money should go to authors that take price in their work and put out a worthwhile product.1/10

I enjoyed first publication of The Two Week Curse, so I was really looking forward to this story.The retreads from the first book, occurring again in this book, took much away. Plus there seemed to be a rush to publish, so there were disconnected ideas, and repeats of the same thing within a couple of paragraphs.An example without giving spoilers would be a meeting of the department heads of Alva Dungeon. The character Qin suddenly appears when she wasn't mentioned earlier, and becomes the focus of the department heads' attention after another character speaks. This is something happening here but it got lost.Delilah and Fairy Luo's story could have been combined into one. Fairy Luo disappears from the story after a decent setup, so leaves one hanging. One second she is making a break for the Blue Lotus, and then is GONE.Characters having knowledge they should not have - a character in the book calls his spies and underlings his doves. First time Eric meets this character, he also calls them doves as well. without having the reference or any foreknowledge.There is a lot to like here, but the book could have definitely used editing. It feels way to much like the author, who is known for his speed in writing, decided to live up to that rather than telling a good complete story.

Back to back books from one of my top author. First the new spin off of Harmmany War series, now second book of his great new series. His spin off book started slow for me setting up the changes, but the end had my blood going. It also ended with with you wanting more so I look to see if I could find second realm was on Amazon early. Saddly to my state of sleep it was. Both of the realm books are going strong from the start and hard to put down. Another reason for the lack of sleep was it's a long book compared to his others. So hard no problem with the price. Wish he had his RPGLIT books on Kindle Unlimited, but understand his reasoning. Like I said at the beginning he is a top author so ill spend the money. Some of the others RPGLIT are not as good or have too sort a book for their price. Hope Amazon can fix it with the other RPGLIT authors. If your like me and are a KU user and wonder should you start the realms series if it's not KU the answer is YES. Now the sad wait for book two. His Lost Mind Project (my first RPGLIT book. A must read). came out quickly about a month each, but these are longer so will see. Also like to add was happy too see his older sifi military are back on KU so if haven't read them give them a try. I do think the Realms book are his best.

I have all five books (and the first three audiobooks). I have been through the entire series twice and most of the series three times. I recommended this book in one of my FB groups. This is what I wrote.This is a bit out there but I'm thinking many will find it amusing.Like most of us I'm a multi-faceted person. I am a wife and mother, a crafter, a programmer and much more. I love to cook and create new recipes. Our son is the light of my life, kind, generous, funny, handsome . . . yeah, I'm biased. So sue me.So many others are just like me. They may not knit or quilt but they engage in arts or skills that stimulate the brain.I read UF (urban fantasy) and sci-fi. I'm not a reader of romance though I have been. We change as we age, it's a fact of life.My latest big read has been the Ten Realms series by Chatfield, a Canadian author. He's an awesome creator. As a MMORPG player the story is really rewarding. As a libertarian it's absolutely and completely dead funny. The author is doing his very best to make socialism work. I didn't catch it the first time I listened to the series. Each subsequent listen makes the desperate attempts to make socialism work OMGosh funny.If you want really good story with really poor editing (a good editor would have reduced the books by 20% by tightening up the story and removed repetitious explanations) with really good world building and a tremendous ignorance of human nature, you might want to try this series.

I think it, much like it's predecessor is a rather good read. But like the title of this review suggests it's riddled with minor grammatical issues throughout. Misspelling of character names is also another fault, but my biggest thing that affected my reading was the poor grammer that affected the flow of reading. Scenes just seemed to appear, creatures and details that had no descriptions or if they did they were generic and repeated, I think that the basis of the story is really interesting and well thought out. But I think that an editor or third party should really rummage through this and turn it from a pretty good read into an amazing one.

As of the time I read this (25/11/18), the number of spelling and grammatical errors in this book really bugged me, along with the occasional random change in font size. Many words are just completely wrong as if spell check has been allowed to run rampant and change "fix" most of the spelling mistakes with the wrong words.I don't claim to be a perfect grammatical genius, but when publishing a book it should surely be proof read and checked by a few people first and any glaring errors, of which there were many, can be remedied before being published.If not for these issues, I would have given this a 5 star rating as the story and world have been thought out in incredible detail. Hats off to the author for creating a great story and here is to hoping that the third instalment delivers just as well as this one.

Good story and have gone on to read the next in the series.However the kindle edition is plagued with formatting errors. There are spelling and grammar mistakes on every page, the font size and formatting is all over the place. Most of this would have been sorted with a simple run through with a spell checker, the rest with a proof reader. To release it in this fashion is pretty poor!A shame as the story itself is very engaging and I enjoyed it s great deal!

I have enjoyed the series so far, the mechanics of the world are clear and easy to understand, a lot of the excess jargon has been shaved out of it to allow a good merging of game mechanics with a form of reality. My only criticism would be the excess amount of telling with very little showing in how the story is presented. While this doesn't break my enjoyment of the books I think a little more show and less tell would add to the immersion and bring out the stories full potential.

Salt enjoying this series. Prosaic start, but then it takes a hard left turn(possibly at Albuquerque) and the story pulls you in. I'm pretty invested in Alva, and I want to see what happens as they climb the realms.